who am I, asked the fly
why do I have to die
what're the reasons, reasons why
I didn't know, so I lied
I lied and said because it's so
so he asked if I didn't know
I told him that he had to go
so out the window he had flowed
he flowed into the mourning sun
where nights did end and days begun
from where the wintered heaven's run
to dance within the heathen's bund
here bundled in my dreary song
are parts parted to where they don't belong
thoughts submerged in death's billabong
are just water under his bridge prolonged.
Harry Potter dug in his knees,
twisting his shoes.
Wiping the sweat from his
brow with his thumb,
he focused on the view ahead,
narrowing his sight.
His hands were raw
from twisting them
on the finely glossed wood
between them.
Silence filled his ears,
covering the waves
of crowd noise.
All that remained
were him and the flying ball.
Time slowed.
He watched as the winged creature
got closer and closer and closer,
inching slower and slower and slower,
to near stillness.
Though it seemed reasonable
to assume its inevitable stop,
Harry knew that this was a lie
his eyes were telling him.
His hands pulsated
as he
No Such Thing As A Free Lunch by CaptainShyGuy, literature
Literature
No Such Thing As A Free Lunch
Doubts, supposedly.
Spinning collectively with the pouring, refreshing the cup.
"You know..."
Annoying bells clash. Outer worlds roar through the open door.
The eyes across shift, "...What now?"
"There's..."
A waitress loudly babbles pseudonymous numbers of syllables equal or greater to the orders they falsely represent, ironically.
"You see, there's this..."
Thunderous clatter fills above as utensils quake and batter, prompting apologetic promises from first day recruits.
"Well, there's this rope..."
A kettle screams, ancient grease cackles, and opposite voices dance repeated jingles of "Order Up!" and "Thank You, Come Again."
Dea
I chose to speak
this time
these words,
and though they are
fragile things
with only momentary value,
I hope they find you,
finding me,
for whatever its worth
in momentary value;
fragile things,
and though they are,
these words
this time
I chose to speak.
Library Punk -
you clumsily deny,
spilling paint on my canvas.
Got you like a fix:
nose bleeding, narcoleptic,
waiting for a snowy wind.
I'm an eighth note,
rehearsed but ignorable;
graced out of practice.
Mute yesterday.
Delay tomorrow.
Sustain this moment.
(Try not to suffocate)
Prisoners of the Mind by CaptainShyGuy, literature
Literature
Prisoners of the Mind
They hit upon us,
as waves within the tide.
And cause the current's run,
when nothings inside.
We use them till they're out,
like the last remaining light.
We hold them like jealous lovers,
and to keep them we will fight.
We fight, we kill, we imprison,
to make them like a myth.
Like a thought was just a thought,
hide what wasn't ours to begin with.
But they flow, reflect, transverse,
pass through the hands of bravery;
just as they had come to us,
they emancipate their mental slavery.
CC: Heart, Brain, Soul by CaptainShyGuy, literature
Literature
CC: Heart, Brain, Soul
Speak,
my heart,
speak.
I will wrestle my tongue to hear
the words that rush within the flow
like whispers of the brain traded
for whispers of the senses,
running along
my nervous nerves. So,
Calm,
my brain,
calm.
I am the peak of in'surgency,
disparager of id,
but my ears are weak
and my eyes are tired.
See,
My soul,
see.
For my heart is blind
and I am a punch-drunk fool.
who am I, asked the fly
why do I have to die
what're the reasons, reasons why
I didn't know, so I lied
I lied and said because it's so
so he asked if I didn't know
I told him that he had to go
so out the window he had flowed
he flowed into the mourning sun
where nights did end and days begun
from where the wintered heaven's run
to dance within the heathen's bund
here bundled in my dreary song
are parts parted to where they don't belong
thoughts submerged in death's billabong
are just water under his bridge prolonged.
Harry Potter dug in his knees,
twisting his shoes.
Wiping the sweat from his
brow with his thumb,
he focused on the view ahead,
narrowing his sight.
His hands were raw
from twisting them
on the finely glossed wood
between them.
Silence filled his ears,
covering the waves
of crowd noise.
All that remained
were him and the flying ball.
Time slowed.
He watched as the winged creature
got closer and closer and closer,
inching slower and slower and slower,
to near stillness.
Though it seemed reasonable
to assume its inevitable stop,
Harry knew that this was a lie
his eyes were telling him.
His hands pulsated
as he
No Such Thing As A Free Lunch by CaptainShyGuy, literature
Literature
No Such Thing As A Free Lunch
Doubts, supposedly.
Spinning collectively with the pouring, refreshing the cup.
"You know..."
Annoying bells clash. Outer worlds roar through the open door.
The eyes across shift, "...What now?"
"There's..."
A waitress loudly babbles pseudonymous numbers of syllables equal or greater to the orders they falsely represent, ironically.
"You see, there's this..."
Thunderous clatter fills above as utensils quake and batter, prompting apologetic promises from first day recruits.
"Well, there's this rope..."
A kettle screams, ancient grease cackles, and opposite voices dance repeated jingles of "Order Up!" and "Thank You, Come Again."
Dea
I chose to speak
this time
these words,
and though they are
fragile things
with only momentary value,
I hope they find you,
finding me,
for whatever its worth
in momentary value;
fragile things,
and though they are,
these words
this time
I chose to speak.
Library Punk -
you clumsily deny,
spilling paint on my canvas.
Got you like a fix:
nose bleeding, narcoleptic,
waiting for a snowy wind.
I'm an eighth note,
rehearsed but ignorable;
graced out of practice.
Mute yesterday.
Delay tomorrow.
Sustain this moment.
(Try not to suffocate)
You pull me
pull me
pull me into
that
that holds
what holds
within you,
inside the giant wave-ish whale
that encompasses the passes of your trail
letting your oceans integrate to your integral
pulling my pieces under your curves into hall
that a part
apart,
a part of my heart,
who,
who broke
what broke
of the start,
had ran and left me in the bellows,
so hebrew among such highbrow fellows
that he, at Jacob's turn, delight
should shift into the blow-hole's night
and escape
escape
escape of the pack,
alone,
a lone breaks,
and breaks
up your pact
Prisoners of the Mind by CaptainShyGuy, literature
Literature
Prisoners of the Mind
They hit upon us,
as waves within the tide.
And cause the current's run,
when nothings inside.
We use them till they're out,
like the last remaining light.
We hold them like jealous lovers,
and to keep them we will fight.
We fight, we kill, we imprison,
to make them like a myth.
Like a thought was just a thought,
hide what wasn't ours to begin with.
But they flow, reflect, transverse,
pass through the hands of bravery;
just as they had come to us,
they emancipate their mental slavery.
CC: Heart, Brain, Soul by CaptainShyGuy, literature
Literature
CC: Heart, Brain, Soul
Speak,
my heart,
speak.
I will wrestle my tongue to hear
the words that rush within the flow
like whispers of the brain traded
for whispers of the senses,
running along
my nervous nerves. So,
Calm,
my brain,
calm.
I am the peak of in'surgency,
disparager of id,
but my ears are weak
and my eyes are tired.
See,
My soul,
see.
For my heart is blind
and I am a punch-drunk fool.
i climb mountains for you when i can.
it's the least i can do, you see, to tell you about my heart's geography.
the years run through me like a stone, and yet,
when you trace your fingers down my sides, i feel nothing but love.
i am not losing myself here.
i know the passes like someone who's grown up in these hills.
and even so, you show me where the new growth is--
what i wouldn't have seen if it hadn't been for you.
A Guide to Positive Critiques by PoetryPlease, literature
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A Guide to Positive Critiques
A Positive Critique:
• Does not solely concentrate on a poem's weak points, but tempers constructive criticism with acknowledgment of the good features.
• Is not made up of comments like "well done" or emoticons, as they do not explain why the poem is well written. Comments and emoticons belong in the introduction and summary only.
• A knowledge of technical poetic terms is desirable, but not necessary, to be able to provide constructive criticism.
• Try to keep your thoughts focused on the poem and how it affects you as the reader.
• Explain why you liked or disliked the poem; don't just state the emotion it triggered.
•
The fools in the court,
Rubber knives to their throats,
Formal clothes but gaudy makeup,
They entertain us courtiers.
I once loved a jester,
Who had the tawdriest act of all,
But even when the knife bent under his throat,
I prayed it wasn't real.
On the last waltz of Frédéric Chopin,
she tosses her weight as a bedouin.
With the swarms of unfreed creases
migrating to the cornered ceases,
she's bounded onto undanced regions
by fumbling hands of batoned legions
and tempts the tempo of the keys
to wonder who follows and who leads.